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Thursday, September 27, 2018

Letter :D

Brielle De Mesa
Hornby
Christchurch


Thursday, August 30


Mr. Hilliard
Hornby
Christchurch


Dear Mr. Hilliard


I like it when we get to play at the new gym because the new gym is softer than the old one and I really liked sliding on the soft floors because it’s very fun for me to do and it also gives me joy when i’m doing it. What I extremely like at the new gym is the windows and seats because the old gym doesn’t have any seats like the new one do, I didn’t liked the windows at the old gym much because the only things I could see through the windows were the sky and trees, I like the new windows more because I could see all the things outside and see what the other students doing.


I didn't expect that there would be spaces inside the gym because I really like the new space near the doorway because there is a place to seat while listening to instructions. The new changing room is way different to the old one because it’s cleaner and bigger than the 2 old changing rooms. The new toilets may be smaller than the old one but I think that it’s greater because of the sink beside the tissues. I like that you added an automatic lights at the top of the toilets but it may be greater if the locks cannot be opened outside the toilet.


What I think you should do to make it more fun is let us play the sport games instead of dancing or running so it would be more exciting and more fun especially for the football. You should also let us play dodgeball more often because I think it practises my dodge balls when it’s about to hit me. It would probably be great if you let us play exciting games every time you give us free time. It would be more fun if you give us more time playing instead of talking.

Your sincerely

Brielle De Mesa

1 comment:

  1. Hello Brielle!

    Well done on posting your writing to your blog. I enjoyed working with your class today.

    Can you reformat your letter so that it isn't running off the page? I bet your readers really want to see what you have to say about our new gym!

    - Miss Birtch

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